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Now as the snow falls,
and I stand beneath gray skies
waiting there to see
if you will return today,
if you will return today,
How silent the air,
how empty the road ahead,
and yet hope warms me
even while I shiver here,
even while I shiver here.
O wind that mocks me,
your touch like his sweet caress
across my soft cheek,
but his never was so cold,
but his never was so cold.
O Yuki-Onna,
Snow Woman, do not mock me
As I stand and wait –
The stories say you loved once,
The stories say you loved once.
and I stand beneath gray skies
waiting there to see
if you will return today,
if you will return today,
How silent the air,
how empty the road ahead,
and yet hope warms me
even while I shiver here,
even while I shiver here.
O wind that mocks me,
your touch like his sweet caress
across my soft cheek,
but his never was so cold,
but his never was so cold.
O Yuki-Onna,
Snow Woman, do not mock me
As I stand and wait –
The stories say you loved once,
The stories say you loved once.
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This piece reminds me of a film I saw a few years back. It was about a girl from a small Chinese village in the 1950s, waiting everyday by a long road, in the snow, for her beloved to return. As for the piece itself, I like your use of repetition at the end of each stanza/tanka. For me, it created the effect of time being extended, slow-moving, and I am there with persona whispering her thoughts like a mantra under her breath. I also appreciate the link explaining what the Yuki Onna was -- very fascinating. It seems that whenever I read something of yours I’d learn something new 
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